"Doublewide"


Date: 1/31/10
Title: "DOUBLEWIDE"
Author: JACQUELINE STAHL
Format: SP
Pages: 112
Time: Present
Locale: Philadelphia
Genre: Drama
Analyst: Hollywoodscript.com

PREMISE: In the aftermath of her sister’s sudden death, KATE FLYNN (33) feels horribly betrayed when she discovers that her sister gave custody of her children to an elderly friend, GLORIA WINGER. Determined to change this, Kate reports Gloria to Human Services when she discovers that the old woman lives in what appears to be an unsafe, dilapidated trailer. But irony will prevail in the ensuing battle when Gloria sees through Kate’s existential pain, coaxes her to choose love over pride, and helps her unearth a part of herself that might comfort and even inspire her sister’s grieving children.

Concept VERY GOOD
Characterization EXCELLENT
Dialogue EXCELLENT
Story Line EXCELLENT
Setting/Prod. Values VERY GOOD
Freshness of Story VERY GOOD

SYNOPSIS KATE FLYNNE (33) and her sister JUNE have both always loved to dance, but Kate is the one who had the drive to do something with it. Aggressive and focused, Kate owns her own dance studio and coaches for high level dance competitions. June, on the other hand, is happiest doing silly dances with her children in her messy living room. While she is a dedicated single mom, June is usually disorganized and broke; so Kate has dutifully helped keep June and her kids afloat, especially financially. Although Kate gets impatient with her sister’s chaotic ways, June adds tenderness and humor to Kate’s otherwise hard-driving life. So Kate is devastated to the core when June dies suddenly in a car accident.

But no one feels the loss more than June’s children. Her daughter CORRIE (12) used to get laughs out of everyone by making fun of her wacky mom. Now, she is wracked with guilt over it. While Corrie quietly struggles with these feelings, her brother WILLIAM (5) is even more vulnerable. A few days after June’s death, he lies in his back yard praying for his mom to come back. At almost the same moment, he glimpses a deer running in the shadows of some nearby woods. Unable to see the deer clearly, he sees what he wants to see and yells, “Mommy!” He chases an illusion of his mother into the woods, and from this moment on, he keeps a constant, grueling lookout for her.

Kate knows these children need great love and support, but her impatience and quick temper make her an unlikely caregiver. Even so, she feels horribly betrayed when she discovers that June gave custody of the kids to her elderly friend, GLORIA WINGER. Therefore, when Kate discovers that Gloria lives in a rusty, dilapidated trailer, she calls the Department of Human Services (DHS) to report Gloria’s home as “dangerous and unsanitary.” She hopes DHS will give her custody once Gloria’s home is deemed unsafe.

Biding her time until DHS arrives, Kate visits the kids often at Gloria’s trailer and tries to console them in their grief; but they repeatedly push her away and seek comfort instead from Gloria and her daughter, JENNY. Gloria can’t help but notice Kate’s pain, and overlooking Kate’s antagonistic behavior, she comforts her by saying, “June loved you very much…. She said you used to be the nicest person she knew.” Kate focuses inconsolably on the words, “used to be,” and desperately asks, “What happened to me?”

With this question in mind, Kate goes on a somber review of her life and has increasing trouble focusing on her work. One day while coaching at a dance competition, she searches for solitude by closing herself into an empty conference room. Alone, she leans against the wall, closes her eyes, and finds herself expressing her grief through mournful dance movements. Then, suddenly feeling watched, she opens her eyes and finds her ex-husband BRICE (33) staring at her through a window in the door. Immediately angry, Kate exits the room and refuses to even look at him.

Eight years earlier, Kate caught her husband, who was also her dance partner, in a lustful embrace with another dancer. Since then, he married his mistress and took the competitive dance circuit by a storm. Kate feels that Brice humiliated her in front of the whole dance world and then left her in the dust, and she has spent years trying to regain her professional dignity while covering her pain with anger.

Now, seeing Brice, Kate is flooded with a barrage of hard, complicated emotions; and these feelings compel her to consider advice from, of all people, Gloria. Carefully considering Kate’s situation, Gloria encourages her to “talk it out” with Brice.

GLORIA
I’m sure he would give you lots of dumb reasons why he treated you so badly. But his reasons, his real reasons, could never hurt you as much as the one’s you’ve constructed in your own head.

Kate resists Gloria’s advice, and the next time she sees Brice, she renders him speechless with scathing criticisms. But just as she is about make a smug exit, she stops herself and musters the courage and self-control to talk constructively with him.

By the end of their conversation, Kate realizes that she has compromised everything that matters “just because some guy bruised my ego.” Armed with this realization, Kate pours great energy into healing her life, and in the process, she unearths a part of herself that is able to help her niece and nephew with their grief.

When Corrie confesses her guilt about the way she treated her mom, she is grateful when Kate gently explains, “Corrie, you’re twelve. You’re supposed to make fun of your mom.” Kate then turns her attention to William, who is still convinced that his mother’s spirit is in the woods. Busy keeping a somber lookout for her, he spends many solitary hours staring into the woods; but Kate joins him in his lookout and insightfully helps him re-engage with life.

Cherishing her newfound connection with the kids, Kate is grateful to Gloria for seeing through her anger and helping her mend her heart. However, Kate’s mother ANNETTE is still mired in bitterness. Ill-equipped to handle the many emotional injuries of her life, Annette funnels her far-reaching anger toward Brice, for hurting and humiliating her daughter, and toward Gloria for taking her grandchildren.

As Annette continues to push for custody of the kids, Kate makes peace with June’s decision to give them to Gloria. But her former actions come back to haunt her when a DHS social worker arrives at Gloria’s dilapidated trailer, deems it unsafe, and insists on removing the children from the home.

Full of shame, Kate has no idea how to fix this awful mess. But eventually she musters all her resources and, in the process, pulls both Annette and Brice into Gloria’s world. They are all suddenly together in a place where they might choose love and freedom over pride and worldly success.

COMMENTS:

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Jacqueline Stahl is a fine writer, a real comer and this is the second time she’s won our contest. DOUBLEWIDE has all the bells and whistles when it comes to excellent and compelling drama. It’s touching, meaningful and totally engaging. Kate is a first class protagonist whose plight is constantly engaging and relatable. She is surrounded by equally important and memorable characters; everyone contributes and contributes well. Although it’s definitely very much a “character” piece it never lags, and is popping with plotty escalations that keep you turning the pages of the script. On the level of films such as LIFE AS A HOUSE and in a way KRAMER VS KRAMER, this dynamic piece of work will make an unforgettable movie..